MaliceInWickedland
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During English on Friday, we were assigned to do a free-verse poem that tells a story about a time in your life that "changed" you or your view on life and we have to present it to the class. My poem is called "A December to Remember" and it's about the day my father was killed in a car accident while he was returning home from Christmas shopping right after he got off from work.
Usually I completely panic about presentations but in this case I'm more worried about the outcome of my poem rather than the presentation itself. If I could get your opinions on my poem or any suggestions on changes I should make to it, PLEASE feel free to post them here. It'll be very much appreciated!!
Usually I completely panic about presentations but in this case I'm more worried about the outcome of my poem rather than the presentation itself. If I could get your opinions on my poem or any suggestions on changes I should make to it, PLEASE feel free to post them here. It'll be very much appreciated!!
A December To Remember
A dreadful day came about one December
One that I shall forever remember
Since nobody else knows
This is how the story goes…
A dreary December afternoon had dropped by
Giving no warning that someone special was to die
A little girl sat by the window enjoying the incoming breeze
Never having felt so much at ease
Soon to arrive home would be her treasure
The distance between them but a measure
Hours continued to come and go by
The little girl let out a worried sigh
Why was Daddy so late today?
Where had he gone so far away?
Her stomach worryingly began to churn
But out of love she still awaited his return
The moon rose high into the night sky
Overlooking the earth below like a gleaming eye
The girl's hopes rose as lights flashed in the driveway
The lights were not her father's car, much to her dismay
She could hear Death's rotting hands knocking on the door
The cold essence of his breath embracing her forevermore
As the girl’s mother opened the door with a frown
Gazing upon two gloomy officers looking down
Trying to think of a kinder way
To share what they had to say
Knowing it was anything but good news
Their words could only hurt and confuse
Reality itself became a car crash
Suddenly shattering within a flash
The lights became a flurry of red and blue
Death's hands bidding the little girl adieu
As the policemen returned to their domain
Leaving the little girl behind to go insane
The sadness and shock was too much for her
Leaving her thoughts to drown within this disaster
Nine years come and go...
The now sixteen-year-old girl gazes out of the same window
As a thought crosses her mind, recalling that day nine years ago
Out of all six cars involved, why did Daddy have to go?
A dreadful day came about one December
One that I shall forever remember
Since nobody else knows
This is how the story goes…
A dreary December afternoon had dropped by
Giving no warning that someone special was to die
A little girl sat by the window enjoying the incoming breeze
Never having felt so much at ease
Soon to arrive home would be her treasure
The distance between them but a measure
Hours continued to come and go by
The little girl let out a worried sigh
Why was Daddy so late today?
Where had he gone so far away?
Her stomach worryingly began to churn
But out of love she still awaited his return
The moon rose high into the night sky
Overlooking the earth below like a gleaming eye
The girl's hopes rose as lights flashed in the driveway
The lights were not her father's car, much to her dismay
She could hear Death's rotting hands knocking on the door
The cold essence of his breath embracing her forevermore
As the girl’s mother opened the door with a frown
Gazing upon two gloomy officers looking down
Trying to think of a kinder way
To share what they had to say
Knowing it was anything but good news
Their words could only hurt and confuse
Reality itself became a car crash
Suddenly shattering within a flash
The lights became a flurry of red and blue
Death's hands bidding the little girl adieu
As the policemen returned to their domain
Leaving the little girl behind to go insane
The sadness and shock was too much for her
Leaving her thoughts to drown within this disaster
Nine years come and go...
The now sixteen-year-old girl gazes out of the same window
As a thought crosses her mind, recalling that day nine years ago
Out of all six cars involved, why did Daddy have to go?
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