Just a stupid poem I wrote

[Psychedelicious]

I believe in the power of editing

 

[Leki]

Thats really good!

I wish i could write like that.

 

[Psychedelicious]

awww thank you soo much !!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

[NothingElseMatters]

no stupid at all!.actually it could have the title:The symptoms of SA :twisted:





---and nothing else matters---

 

[yuiko]

..and it doesn't suck at all....nice poem.

 

[lifes_to_long]

its really good but one thing i will say is the rhyming words are too close together.

 

[IceNerveshatter]

I was really bored and this took me like 15 minutes so I hope it dosen't suck too badly. I can't believe I'm actually posting this, and it's likely I'll get paranoid and take it down. Here it is =/ ::

No Room for conversation
Just mindless contemplation
Of what to say and how to say it
Either way it's all unfit
Inability to look into one's eyes
Creates a world of plastic lies
Expressing emotions in the wrong direction
Only furthers this painful rejection
Always locked inside this isolation
For all communication
Is done through Silent Conversation.


bleh

Wow this is really good. Similar to my style in a way. I like that it's short too. You communicate everything in a minimalistic manner. I like it.

 

[Hoth]

Bit late in reading this... but I like it. It expresses a lot in very few words.

The only thing I'd change, because I'm a nitpicker who takes writing seriously (though I'm no good at poetry), is to remove "one's". Seems to be clearer and flow better without it.

 

[nephatitus]

i dont see anything wrong with this for it too be called stupid

 

[Ashiene]

i love that poem is short very meaningful tho

 

[LonelyLeaf]

That's actually quite very good!

 

[freestylemonster]

Wow awesome poem! I've tried writing poems before buuuut I suck haha

 

[sleepysparrow]

This is great. You are really good at expressing yourself with words. Keep writing!