Poem "Believe"

[Confuseddd]

I dont know if im done with this yet, might add more to it later but for now this is it also i was thinking , should i call it anything, everything ?


be a child inside, safe from pain and too young to die

Hold your head up high, make believe your 20 feet off the ground

Floating there with a flower bewteen your hair, your an actress

your the cool breeze in the air, your the light radiating from heaven, and see?

your anything, your everything , exactly what you want to be , and see?

your only what you think you are. I think you are soothing, amazing, even breathe taking

I think you are alluring , sublime , and a unique find

Be who you want to be and shine

I hope you come to find your exactly what you want to be

I hope soon you see your anything, your everything.

 

[3lefts]

I think this is good!
I think all your poetry is good, or rather what I've read so far
Most of all I love this concept. Can I be a bit of an editor?
Some of your "your"s should be "you're"s, but then what does it really matter.
It reminds me of a part in Innuendo by Queen, not my favourite song by them, (that would be Don't Stop Me Now") but a good song none the less.
"You can be anything you want to be
Just turn yourself into anything you think that you could ever be "

 

[Confuseddd]

I think this is good!
I think all your poetry is good, or rather what I've read so far
Most of all I love this concept. Can I be a bit of an editor?
Some of your "your"s should be "you're"s, but then what does it really matter.
It reminds me of a part in Innuendo by Queen, not my favourite song by them, (that would be Don't Stop Me Now") but a good song none the less.
"You can be anything you want to be
Just turn yourself into anything you think that you could ever be "

hey thanks , appreciate that
yeah grammar is not my strong point as you can tell. X - O
I hope it doesnt make my poetry unreadable ?
I will attempt to get better at that , do you have any poetry ?

 

[freestylemonster]

I like it Nice and uplifting

 

[3lefts]

I hope it doesnt make my poetry unreadable ?

Not at all, in fact it might even add something to it, definitely doesn't take anything away from it! So no worries
Me, write poetry? On a spur of the moment I will. But it's not so much my thing.