ANOTHER little poem of mine

[Scottish_Player]

Not a good one but its ME

I feel myself going quietly insane
and iam calling out but no one hears my pain
They are all walking by with their heads held high
No one looks in my direction and it makes me want to cry

I just want some one to come and help me out
But i dont know how too get their attention
when i cant even shout
I sit here quielty hoping some good luck comes my way
but i dont know if i can do this shit even for another day :roll:

 

[Marin]

I like your poem, it flows nicely and I relate to feeling like you don't know how to connect to people, and then when you try, feeling like no one notices.

I think it would be good as song lyrics also

 

[Carina33]

I agree with Marin..... that is nice! Like he says, it just flows and you don't get stuck anywhere, unlike in the poems I used to try to write. It's excellent because I can relate to it. It's excellent because it is not formal and boring.

 

[Scottish_Player]

Thanks for the comments, i was just feeling a little pissed off the other night and had to write something down as writing stuff down helps me let it out. :roll:

 

[kattness]

i like it.. makes me feel sad though - making people feel emotions is the making of a good poem

 

[redlady]

What are talking about - not a good one - i think it's great. It's honest, open and expressive. When you read it, it makes you feel something. All the things a poem should be made of.

 

[Hellraising]

It's good.