My pain

Boundless

Well-known member
Hello guys,please go easy on me i have NEVER done anything like this before so be gentle,pretty much just made this up in note pad.

I call this,My pain:

Alone i wait for someone to see
The terrible pain that is consuming me
No relief only suffering and pain
Never any energy allways so drained

Dealt a bad hand? maybe,but some how
i must break free
My mind so weak what shall i do?
Oh how i wish i could be more like you


People around dont understand
My future by each day looks more bland
One day i may see life for what it truely be
For now i shall have to wait and see.
 

redlady

Well-known member
Hi Boundless i promise i will be gentle - i am pretty much that way by nature anyway. You made this up on the spot - wow, that is some wonderful artistic creativity you have inside of you. I personally relate to your poem - your words - myself which is why i liked it so much. Their are a lot of creative people on this site - perhaps it is to do with us being so much in our minds all the time. Again loved the poem thankyou for sharing - it's not easy to put yourself out there. Especially for us folk. :D
 

blubs

Well-known member
another cool poem.
maybe we could have a sticky poetry thread...so they don't get lost?
I love to re-read poems, they never seem to loose anything the more you read them.
 

Boundless

Well-known member
Well thanks for your kind words,i was feeling down again so i wrote this,not great i know but it helps me and who knows i might improve
:oops:

They suffer in silence,mainly alone
They have a bleak life,bound to there home
One step out side,no more a safe zone
Panic sets in, desperation ensues
what ever to do,i have no clues

These feelings of dread and fear wont disappear
Its getting so bad im driven to tears
Lord why cant i leave this house?
I shall never feel the true love of a spouse

A simple walk seems so far
Everywhere i go i must take a car
I feel so lonely,no one to relate
All i feel now is pain and hate
Losing all hope,this cant go on
One day i hope my phobias will be gone
So i can get on with my life and finally move on.
 

Invisible_Alien

Well-known member
Very good, can totally relate to both. Writing seems to help me express myself the best way, I think its true for many of us.
 

Scottish_Player

Well-known member
Boundless said:
A simple walk seems so far
Everywhere i go i must take a car
I feel so lonely,no one to relate
All i feel now is pain and hate

Two great poems there, i really like that line above, i can relate so much to it :roll:
 

redlady

Well-known member
Boundless wrote:


Thnks wasnt sure how people would take them :oops: but seems ok :)

Such talent and modesty to boot - you know i think i would be hard pressed not to get a big head if i could write as you do my talented friend.
 

shyandnumb

Well-known member
Your poems were sad but good. The emotions of the two poems were so vivid. I can sometimes reach that emotional level in my own poems, but for some reason it always out of reach. :( Also, You're very modest about your work, which made me like your poems more than if you're were overconfident. :wink:



" To be shy,
but to always remain
Open to world
In front of my eyes,
And not to shred a tear
In the face of pain." [/u]
 
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