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i think it only sounds decent if you read it out loud :(

I was beaten down and brutalised
left a mess , ready for death
My questions unanswered and god musta been busy
I couldnt move on cause my bridge was gone
Blown up and scattered the pieces were burnt and shattered
remember me Crying . . was in the shower . .
god with all his power, sent a message through to me
Or so i thought , in my darkest hour
so i spent some time , searching for pieces to my bridge
Slowly rebuilding , and to me learning was living
Growing internally and so was my will
living objectively to discover my self
i found some answers that were related to my health
My health returned , my soul was happy, for it had yearned
My eyes gleamed brightly, for they were no longer scorned
So much had happened and i was beginning to rejoice and no longer mourn
My bridge was finished on a sunny day my friends were with me to walk its length
Now these old memorys could fade away . .
And they did. . They were blurring as i was flourishing
Till one day , i struggled to remember that i had gone through and experience i shoulda remembered
Till one day the past , in my head what seemed like a myth
had ran a million miles to reminice , to smash a hole through my chest
to take my heart and leave it a lifeless mess
just like before , ready for death
im beaten down im brutalised
left with questions
left a mess . .
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Confuseddd,

I like your poem emotions breath on me if i read it!Well done keep writing.
Thank you for posting. I wish that u feel much better as say your emotional poem in real live but is hard i know...
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I like your poem emotions breath on me if i read it!Well done keep writing.
Thank you for posting. I wish that u feel much better as say your emotional poem in real live but is hard i know...
thanks for the feedback
I get depressed occasionally i guess.
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thanks for the feedback
I get depressed occasionally i guess.

no problem=o) i like read poetry specially of people what knows what about they write coz they go trought this feeling and put it on paper i thinks is great let it go somehow out.I write to sometimes but if i would be better in english my work will be better. Depression is struggling people what dont have clue will never understand. They can be perceiving but thats it.
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