Some of my poems!

Alistair

Alistair

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Howdy,


Just tell me there is -
A rhyme or a reason,
For calling me a liar,
Waiting for eternity,
In what you conspire
By calling me a fool,
But we must go on,
Like changing of the seasons

“It is hard to remember,
And to forget, as we fall -
To our intertwined fate,
Lying within the shadows
Destiny that we create”

A created solitude,
By chasing a dream
Of a haunted past,
Lying broken hearted,
Upon the autumn hills
With a shattered mind,
Is ever so hard to forget,
Your cold hearted scheme

“Refrain”

Just tell me there is –
Reason for calling me a liar,
When you’re the deceiver,
Maybe I’m the fool,
With the broken mind
As memories are,
So hard to forget…
In what the psyche desires…


Another poem...

The blowing wind of ice,
Across the winter's sand,
Within the darkest light
Upon the burning flame,
Of your endless plight

Upon a mountain afar,
Blowing across the caps,
Heart, frozen ever cold
Trapped in paradise -
Of gold...

"Remember, my name,
Under Luna's cold light -
Passion of a shining soul,
Trapped within a cage,
Your destiny you stole..."

Sparkling sunlight,
Melts away the darkness
In a winter wonder-land
Leaving a icy cage,
Of where you stand

Tracing your hand,
Over your cold prison,
The key, within a broken mind
Holding back dreams,
Of a southern wind...

""Remember, my name
Under Luna's cold light...
As destiny dances -
Within my head,
Just a game of chance""


""Just remember, your name..."""

Lemme know what ya guys think!
 
kihira

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Hi Alistair, welcome! :)

Poetry doesn't compute in my head at all, so I can't comment on yours; I like your photos, though. Zoo shots are so hard to take well.
 
Alistair

Alistair

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Phocas,

Thank you! I appreciate it! That's all right, poetry isn't for everything, and to be honest. I never thought I would be writing, but I guess it's one of my "vents" which I think is a perfect way to explain it. Despite, I've been writing for awhile I still don't think it's top notch quality. I guess the hardest critic is oneself, tho.

For the pictures. Yeah, it was a challenge for some of 'em and I'm just getting back into it after being 10 years out of it and the days of 35 MM. =)
 
MaliceInWickedland

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Nice poems you have there!! Your use of imagery is absolutely breathtaking.

My favorite part:

A created solitude,
By chasing a dream
Of a haunted past,
Lying broken hearted,
Upon the autumn hills
With a shattered mind,
 
Alistair

Alistair

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Malice,

Thank you, and telling me your favorite part. =) I do try to focus on imagery, but sometimes it doesn't work, and sometime it doesn't, and personally, I don't think this one was that good, tho. Once again like Phocas the writer is the hardest critic.
 
Alistair

Alistair

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Here is one that I did January of 01 towards end of the month. I think this was about a year or two after I started to write, and these past few years after that I wrote ALOT, and some pretty dark stuff. Recent years, I don't have time to write since the real world hit. Hehe. Also, I think the ABABB scheme is my strongest writing style.

Enjoy!

Shadow Travel


I travel lands unknown
Seeking riches and fame
As I drown and choke
Giving myself all the blame
Just name of the game…

Searching in these lands
Standing in the wind
Looking far as I can see
Denying my lost mind
It’s own destiny of man-kind


Refrain:
“Reality just seems to shift
A random sense of a pain
While holding my own life
Losing everything I gain
Shadows in the rain…
Shadows in the rain…”


I see the reality of me
Burning in the vision
Lying beneath the stars
Trying to reach a decision
Just a horrible division

In my heart and mind
Cursing into the night
Falling deeper into this hole
Searching for the light
Knowing nothing is right


Refrain


All that I can remember now
Is falling through the crack
Reality hugging me so close
Twisting the distorted fact
Drowning in my own act…
 
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Alistair

Alistair

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Summer shines,
What a swell life,
Of magnificent magnitude
Soaking in the rays,
I need a reason to go,
Far away from here,
As I travel distant lands,
Visions of another day

Here is another quick one I did the other day, short, but straight to the point

Enjoy!
 
Alistair

Alistair

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This one was a real struggle for me, honestly. I'm still not happy with it per say, but yeah. It took me about 3 hours of beating my head against a glass desk to get even this far! Ha!


Can’t stop dreaming of you,
Dressed in summer white,
Under bonfires of night,
Feelings that ignite
Feel so right…

Catching a glimpse,
There could be a chance
Dancing the night away,
Hiding from your glance
As I lie in a trance…


A moment of time,
Of your warming heart,
Melts away the pain,
Makes me feel part,
Of astrology’s chart
The stars feel aligned,
Within my mind


Staring at the celling,
Perchance to dream,
Reality sets in motion
Of what I dread,
Fates little thread

That I have to let go,
Tormenting my soul,
A universe of hope,
Takes its waking toll,
A heart that you stole…
 
Alistair

Alistair

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Malady,

Thank you, despite that you've seem to have "Disappeared."

Oddly, I won't have a fit of writing like that until about another half year to a year. I really don't seem to write as much as I use to do to stress or what not. =) Getting in that "Mood," is always a pain to attain.

Either way, thanks!
 
Alistair

Alistair

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EscapeArtist,

Thank you. It's one of my better older ones! I think some of the best ones I tend to do our down within a few hours.
 
DespairSoul

DespairSoul

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HI ALI:)

WOAH:) you have really dare your poetry is amazing:)

I write to some but next to yours i should better admit i doo:)

I have simple one u have more colorfull and emotive with metaforas i like it!

If i maybe could talk english better maybe i will be little better but i like do write poetry coz i express my feelings trough and feel nice after if i write something.

Keep writing i like to read more!
 
Alistair

Alistair

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Despair,

Thank you. Well, if English isn't your primary language you have an excuse, but the best I can say is keep writing. It took me forever get this point, and still don't think I'm the greatest. There is alot of other people out there, despite lot's of folks pressure me to send my stuff in. Maybe one of these days when I'm brave. All it is practice and more practice.
 
DespairSoul

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Alistair said:
Despair,

Thank you. Well, if English isn't your primary language you have an excuse, but the best I can say is keep writing. It took me forever get this point, and still don't think I'm the greatest. There is alot of other people out there, despite lot's of folks pressure me to send my stuff in. Maybe one of these days when I'm brave. All it is practice and more practice.
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You are welcome:)

An excuse no no excuses here:)just i like to express my feelings with way write poetry(amteur poetry)but you are talented. Some can practice years but never will catch some one who have really dare for writing poetry. I think u are one of them. U must not be the greatest. Importand is that u love it and give something out Emotions,anger,sadness, whatever what u feel at that time.
 
Alistair

Alistair

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Fearn,

Yes, and no. A lot of artists, the more complex one (Which I was raised up with) such as Rush, Porcupine Tree, Jethro Tull, so on have all different styles with their songs. All that matters is the flow is still there, and goes with the music. Granted, your entitled to your own opinion, but this is how I see it when I write sometimes.

Liam,

Thank you, but I've been doing this for a long time 10+ years. I've lost count, and there is a lot of stuff I have that I never finished, so I deleted it and never see the light of day again. =P By looks of your picture, your 16? That's when I started, give or take just not as serious. Keep at it, and pushing your limits, and READ and READ. This really does help your vocabulary and flow, IMO.

Despair,

Thanks again, and yes. I do love it, despite I never envisioned in a million years when I was younger that I was going to end up writing, at all.
 
Alistair

Alistair

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All right. A new one. Not to happy with this one, I just wanted to wrap it up for it's been annoying me for this past week and half to do. Hehe. Enjoy!

I don’t know where I’m going
Floating through the clouds,
A world unknown to me
With these undesirable crowds

Hiding from the harsh reality,
Of what I am to find,
I just feel ever so lost,
In the world that I designed


Emotions,
Are ever so raw, and real…
Turning like a broken wheel
Spinning out of control
In what I conceal…


Feeling ever so ethereal,
Hiding from the past
Within a lucid dream,
Seems so out of contrast

As I fly through open skies,
Trapped in a world,
Of my own damnation,
As reality begins to unfurl…
 
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